The amount of time spend on sport and exercise should be increased in schools in order to tackle the problem of overweight children? Do you think this is the best way to deal with the problem? What other solutions can you suggest?

In my opinion, Sports and exercise should be the main factor for our children to maintain their fitness. Schools should not only be responsible for our children's mental state and growth, but
also
for keeping our children's physical health under check. Obesity has become
such
a huge issue in our world that every
third
person is suffering from obesity, not to mention the diseases that
comes
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come
with it,
such
as, type 1 and type 2 Diabetes, Heart risks, cancer and so on. In our culture, Schools have just become a place where we think students should gain A* in every academic subject and think of physical education as a secondary element.
This
thinking is just plain wrong and we need to take some harsh so that we can easily overcome
this
issue. Teaching children about their physical condition and how to maintain a healthy lifestyle is pretty important in my opinion
this
should start in schools. Schools should conduct special assemblies to teach the younger students about the importance of exercise and sports. Schools could
also
organize different events in-order to encourage the students to play different sports and so on. But in my opinion, only increasing the time spent on sports in schools to solve
this
problem isn't enough. We need to do more in order to fully take control of
this
growing situation.
First
of all, we can easily join hands with parents and show them that just by increasing an hour of outdoor activities can drastically
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increase
their child's physical condition. Obesity is growing like a cancer in our world, taking hold of everything, rotting away the beauty of
this
world.
This
is a serious issue and we need to tackle it as soon and as severely as possible.

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