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People sleep less than before in many countries. Why do people sleep less? What effect does it have on an individual and society?

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Sleep is very important to humans.
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, modern humans tend to sleep fewer than previous. In my opinion, lack of sleep will cause many drawbacks for not only an individual, but
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 society. Nowadays, humans seem to have less sleep
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 than before. In fact, many people said that they reduced their sleeping hours due to the overload of works. To illustrate, architects and engineers always have to do lots of extra working hours for their projects at
night
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 to reach the deadline.
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, stress
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 has an important role in causing less sleep
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. It affects a lot
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 sleeping quality. People could not sleep well if they have plenty of things need to worry about at
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.
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, there is a group of people having less sleep
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 because of the attraction of
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 activity
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 as go to a bar or club. Sadly, most of them are youth. Lack of sleep causes many drawbacks for an individual. Many documents have proven that sleep
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 is connected to
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human
 health. Normally, adults should rest for eight hours per
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 or they will feel tired and easy to get angry.
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 the other hand, does not have enough sleep
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 affect the work’s quality. People will not sober enough to find out their mistakes. Sleeping less not only cause the problems for an individual, but
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 society. In fact, we can hear plenty of accidents caused by the sleepy driver every day. As I mentioned before, humans tend to get mad easily if they do not have enough sleep,
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, the number of arguments occur on the street will increase dramatically. It is a negative
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society's
 development. In conclusion, sleep has an important role in
humans
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human
 development. It helps us to release our tiredness and stress after a long day at workplaces.
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, humans should set up a balance between working hours and resting hours. I believe that our works will have the highest quality if we have enough sleep
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