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Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? You should write at least 250 words. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. You should give reasons for your answer using your own ideas and experience.

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No matter how the world changed socially technologically and etc. The
food
 will always be the important thing in human life. Now most of the cooking and preparing ways keep changing in every
decades
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decade
 and after each decade cooking become more easier. Nowadays we can prepare
food
 much faster and easier than it ever was. The innovation in cooking technology
such
 of oven, microwaves and so on made our live easier. We can have time for our own activities without wasting a lot of time on cooking
food
. All these
changes improve our
Suggestion
changes to improve our
life especially
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life, especially
knowingly
Suggestion
knowing
 the fact that in modern live everything moving so fast and people don’t have enough time to do everything. Even though the technology has changed in cooking the some of the methods of cooking still remain old fashioned.
Also
 not everyone can afford these technologies and they have to use
old fashioned way
Suggestion
the old fashioned way
 of cooking and other use
this
 way because of their conservative point of view. Most of the people who use old ways of cooking say that there is no difference between the ways of cooking some of them even believe that
old ways
Suggestion
the old ways
 of cooking are a lot more better and new technology only makes it more complicated. The opinion about ways of cooking and modern ways of easy
food
 preparing. But that doesn’t mean that it didn’t improve our
life it
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life, it
 just mean that some people are more conservative about
this
.
Other
Suggestion
Another
 improvement is preserving good. It is
become
Suggestion
becoming
 possible because of refrigerator, freezer and canning. Today we cannot imagine any house without refrigerator
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