Some people think that the government is wasting money on the arts & that this money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view.

Government
Suggestion
The government
wants a
lot
of
money
on arts. These arts might include creating new statues, decorating walls of stadiums. I think
this
money
could be used in
lot
Suggestion
a lot
lots
of better ways.
Money
that government uses is hard earned
money
by
common people
Suggestion
the common people
that should be utilized on them,
instead
of wasting it on stone sculptures. These sculptures are not going to be useful for anyone, these are just a showpiece by government. Even after wasting enough
money
on these arts, more of it is wasted on throwing parties for their
inaugrations
the act of starting a new operation or practice
inauguration
.
This
money
could be utilized in a
lot
of better ways,
specially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
for a developing country, there are
lot
Suggestion
a lot
more important things to be taken care of. Most efficient use will be to spend
this
on the education of
upcoming generation
Suggestion
the upcoming generation
,
that is
going to be the building blocks of our country. And spending some
on
Suggestion
of
the poor people for creating shelters or on creating small jobs, so that they can take care of themselves and their family. Arts is
also
an important factor for attracting tourism in our country, but for that
instead
of creating new sculptures, they should be concentrating more on the already existing monuments like Taj Mahal. These monuments are already famous worldwide and attract a
lot
of tourism, so
instead
of letting them getting
deteroit
the largest city in Michigan and a major Great Lakes port; center of the United States automobile industry; located in southeastern Michigan on the Detroit river across from Windsor
Detroit
,
money
should be spent
for
Suggestion
in
taking proper care of them.
Hence
spending
money
on
arts
Suggestion
the arts
is important, but spending too much is a waste of hard earned
money
, which could have been utilized
on
Suggestion
for
better purposes.

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