In some countries, the average weight of children is increasing and their level of health and fitness is decreasing. What are the causes of these problems? What measures could be taken to solve them?

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It has been observed that in some countries children are becoming obese and because of

this

their health and fitness levels are dropping.

This

essay will discuss the main factors contributing to

this

and

then

suggest few remedies to counter these issues. The main problem is the increase in binge television

that is

available now, Netflix and other online video streaming websites hook the population up to the screens, because of

this

the young population becomes couch potatoes and the will prefer these internet programs over going out and taking up any sports. The physical activity is very minimal which makes teenagers obese. The other factor due to which younger generation

are not fit

Suggestion

is not fitting

doesn't fit

does not fit

don't fit

is the diet. In

this

fast paced environment the fast

food

has become a phenomenon

such

are burgers, fries and fizzy drinks and intake of these unhealthy

food

Suggestion

foods

has been increased to an unbelievable level. These meals don’t nourish your body properly and

moreover

contain ingredients which are fattening in their nature. There are few solutions to tackle these problems.

First

and for most the younger generation needs to go out and play with their friends. To achieve

this

the

screen

time

has to be controlled, let’s say

Suggestion

for

an hour a day, there are certain apps that

tracks

Suggestion

track

your

screen

time

to help you to control the

screen

time

. Lack of

screen

time

means that to entertain

themselves

of them or themselves

their

children will go out the house and play with

neighbors

a person who lives (or is located) near another

neighbours

and their friends,

this

will help them to become fitter.

Secondly

, the diet needs to more healthy and moving away from oily processed

food

more eating up

Suggestion

eating up more

fresh produce. To achieve

this

we need to explain to children the health benefits of eating healthy and the disastrous effects and how unhealthy processed diets can be to your physical and mental health. In conclusion, the main problem of children being overweight is

increase

Suggestion

increasing

screen

time

due to internet television and increase intake of unhealthy fast

food

however

this

can be tackled by controlling the

screen

time

of your children and encouraging them to take up a sport.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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Prediction or recommendation

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In a nutshell
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meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

351 words

5.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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In some countries, the average weight of children is increasing and their level of health and fitness is decreasing. What are the causes of these problems? What measures could be taken to solve them?

Include an introduction and conclusion

You recently bought an electric gadget for your home . your friend wants the same gadget and needs your advice .in this letter you should include: . what the gadget is .what you think about it .advice about other alternatives your friend could buy

in the past, people wore their traditional clothes and followed their cultures. these days, most people wear similar clothes and therefore look very similar to one another. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They feel that this time should be used to more school work. How do you think children should spend their free time?

Many student choose to take a gap year before starting university, to travel or gain work experience. Do you think this is a good idea or a waste of time? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Rich Countries often give money to poor countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?