In some countries, the average weight of children is increasing and their level of health and fitness is decreasing. What are the causes of these problems? What measures could be taken to solve them?

It has been observed that in some countries children are becoming obese and because of
this
their health and fitness levels are dropping.
This
essay will discuss the main factors contributing to
this
and
then
suggest few remedies to counter these issues. The main problem is the increase in binge television
that is
available now, Netflix and other online video streaming websites hook the population up to the screens, because of
this
the young population becomes couch potatoes and the will prefer these internet programs over going out and taking up any sports. The physical activity is very minimal which makes teenagers obese. The other factor due to which younger generation
are not fit
Suggestion
is not fitting
doesn't fit
does not fit
don't fit
is the diet. In
this
fast paced environment the fast
food
has become a phenomenon
such
are burgers, fries and fizzy drinks and intake of these unhealthy
food
Suggestion
foods
has been increased to an unbelievable level. These meals don’t nourish your body properly and
moreover
contain ingredients which are fattening in their nature. There are few solutions to tackle these problems.
First
and for most the younger generation needs to go out and play with their friends. To achieve
this
the
screen
time
has to be controlled, let’s say
to
Suggestion
for
in
an hour a day, there are certain apps that
tracks
Suggestion
track
your
screen
time
to help you to control the
screen
time
. Lack of
screen
time
means that to entertain
themselves
of them or themselves
their
children will go out the house and play with
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
and their friends,
this
will help them to become fitter.
Secondly
, the diet needs to more healthy and moving away from oily processed
food
to
more eating up
Suggestion
eating up more
fresh produce. To achieve
this
we need to explain to children the health benefits of eating healthy and the disastrous effects and how unhealthy processed diets can be to your physical and mental health. In conclusion, the main problem of children being overweight is
increase
Suggestion
increasing
in
screen
time
due to internet television and increase intake of unhealthy fast
food
,
however
this
can be tackled by controlling the
screen
time
of your children and encouraging them to take up a sport.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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