"Prevention is better than cure". Researching and treating diseases is too costly. So it would be better to invest in preventive measure To what extent do you agree?

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There are two competing philosophies in the
health-care
the preservation of mental and physical health by preventing or treating illness through services offered by the health profession
healthcare
and pharma industries. One is to spend enough resources on both
cure
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and
prevention
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and the latter is to concentrate mainly on the
prevention
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part as it yields long term benefits.
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, in my opinion
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while I agree that
prevention
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is a better long term strategy, there must be sufficient expenditure on the
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cure
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curative
aspect as well.
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, it would be cost effective as well.
Firstly
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, there are millions of people who are already suffering from existing ailments, some of which are fatal. If most of the resources are spent on preventive measures for which there could be cheaper alternatives (for
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Condoms for HIV),
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millions of patients who are already suffering will meet a certain death.
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, preventive medicine
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needs a
back up
an accumulation caused by clogging or a stoppage
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of
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. There were instances of failure on the preventive medicine part. Considering
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, to completely eliminate a disease, wherever possible, a strategy with a combination of
prevention
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and
cure
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should be deployed.
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, it is not cost effective to deploy all the eggs in one basket as well. Invested by organizations or not, the public expenditure would grow exponentially if a
cure
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is not found in time.
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to
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, valuable productive hours of
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the working class
would be lost. Compared to
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, the research spending would be much lesser. To conclude, while preventive medicine is a better way of dealing with a disease in the long run, investing in a
cure
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for it definitely augments the welfare of patients and it will be cheaper as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • preventive measures
  • incidence of diseases
  • quality of life
  • complications and suffering
  • cost-effective
  • ongoing expenses
  • public health education
  • awareness campaigns
  • government policies
  • vaccinations
  • screenings
  • healthy lifestyle promotion
  • healthcare costs
  • long term benefits
  • disease prevention
  • healthcare funding
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