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With the increase in the use of mobile phones and computers, fewer people are writing letters. Some people think that the traditional skill of writing letters will disappear completely. How important do you think letter writing is?Do you think letter writing will completely disappear?

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Although
 the
world
 is moving toward globalization, there are some who are still concerned about the drawbacks of overseas
tourism
. While most of these beliefs have rooted in patriotism, there are some remedies for
this
 issue, as we will discuss here. These opinions about the harmful effects of international
tourism
 come from a history of rage and conflict between the nations, making them mostly exaggerated and revengeful. Iran,
for instance
, was raided by many foreign nations, including Mongols, Arabs, and some European countries which
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 been tremendously afflicted
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 vision.
Consequently
, some radical conservatives argue that every foreigner could be a threat to either country's culture or security. To say
in other words
, most of these hypotheses about the negative effects of
world
traveller
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 are substantially due to insufficient understanding and inaccurate extrapolating the historical facts to current situations. Regarding potential
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, the media's role is of paramount importance, where they could disseminate truthfully and kind information beyond border limits, advertising the benefits of multinational
tourism
.
Furthermore
, digital media could foster their audience to communicate with travellers from around the
world
.
For instance
, Couchsurfing, a social network for
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backpacker
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, has introduced a new way of travelling which involves exploring with
local
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 and discovering cultural differences together. These initiatives and practices undoubtedly would depict a better image from
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 than what used to be in past. To conclude, while it seems that the brouhaha over the negative impact of global
tourism
 has been mostly tied up with the misunderstanding of the new
world
, the media could mitigate
this
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spreading the word of love and respect between nations.
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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