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Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words

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The Social media is used mostly by people of younger age few years ago. Now it is used by any age group.
This
 increase
of
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in
 popularity of social media concerns many people who believe that there is a risk of sharing information on these websites. I think it is worth to risk and it has many advantages. In
this
 essay I will discuss the advantages of Social media and why advantages overshadow disadvantages. The
first
 advantage is the social
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
 are not used only by people but by companies too.
This
help
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helps
 customers to get information about
company
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a company
 without visiting to the company’s building or contact them through the social media. There are even famous and well-developed companies which
shows
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show
 that
this
 social
medias
a means or instrumentality for storing or communicating information
media
 are secured and safe. The social media is good for
advertising especially for
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advertising, especially for
 small companies and beginning companies. Another advantage is easy socializing with other people.
This
 is the main advantage of social media, it is
obviously
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obvious
 why it is called social media. At the beginning the social media built
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 foundation by bringing people of same interest together. Now people can find their old friend or make a new friends on social media.
Moreware
in addition
Moreover
, they can even join the clubs of certain activities which interest them. In conclusion, the social media has many
advantages but we
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advantages, but we
 should not forget about disadvantages and be caution when meeting new people or strangers and always check before sharing personal information.
Morever
in addition
Moreover
, it is up to people to be wise when using social media.
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