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Today more and more tourists are visiting places where the conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or The Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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An increasingly number of
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
, nowadays, are interested in travelling to areas having harsh conditions. Visiting
such
 places
would undoubtedly
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would, undoubtedly
, bring a lifetime experience and recognition over social
media but
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media, but
this
 has its own downsides. One evident benefit of having a vacation in harsh places is the unique and irreplaceable experiences that it brings, which implants a long-lasting memory in oneself.
In other words
, people are astonished to see surreal, breathtaking views that are rarely available elsewhere. Northern lights in Iceland,
for instance
, presents one
such
 example, watching which, leaves people awe-struck. Exhilaration and adrenaline rush are another added benefit for the individuals. Another obvious advantage is the amount of appreciation and recognition sightseers get over social media, once the images of
such
 places are shared over it
by
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with
 them.
Consequently
,
this
 results in an exponential rise in the number of followers over the social platform which helps in alleviating their confidence. There are,
on the other hand
, undeniable disadvantages of visiting places with
unfavorable
not encouraging or approving or pleasing
unfavourable
 condition.
To begin
 with, extreme weather condition of
such
 places, namely, Antarctica or Amazon forests, makes it difficult for the tourist to have comfortable vacation.
Additionally
, most of these places have
scarcity
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a scarcity
 of fundamental requisite for human
survival
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survival, such
such
 as oxygen or drinkable water, which could result in
life-threatening situation
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life-threatening situations
a life-threatening situation
 for
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
. To illustrate, people trekking in
Himalayan region
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the Himalayan region
 sometime lose consciousness due to lack of oxygen and are advised to carry enough oxygen for the trip.
Furthermore
, most of these places are deprived of vegetation because of which tourists have minimal options available and,
therefore
, have to survive on limited supply. To conclude, while there are extra-ordinary experiences and thrill associated with visiting extreme-condition sites, it comes with a price of sacrificing luxury and comfort along with life-threatening circumstances.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breathtaking landscapes
  • unique ecosystems
  • sense of adventure
  • personal growth
  • indigenous cultures
  • environmental conservation
  • climate change
  • environmental degradation
  • economically disadvantaged areas
  • physical health
  • harsh weather
  • difficult terrain
  • limited access to medical facilities
  • fragile ecosystems
  • habitat destruction
  • basic amenities
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