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National costume or traditional wears of a particular country are an important part of the culture of that country, but with globalisation of cultures and other exchanges taking place, now they seem to be losing importance. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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In recent days, people
are giving
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have given
 so much importance to their clothing sense as they believing in cloth make a huge effect on their personal, social and professional life.
In addition
, moving towards globalization, people are adopting
new trend
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new trends
a new trend
 of
wears
a late time of life
years
wars
 from different countries into their routine lifestyle. Some people argue that
this
 is a very critical situation for our own heritage for classical cloths and one should not forget own culture’s part. I totally disagree with their statement. Generally, a person gets
differentiate
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differentiated
 and get identified for their nationality by their skin, clothes, language, and food. In which, the cloth is playing an important role.
Although
 traditional cloths provide respect to one’s nationality, it makes people to discomfort to have these clothes all over time.
For example
, in India, wearing Shervani for men and Sari for women in marriage or in
Hindu festival
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a Hindu festival
 gives them the opportunity to get respect and makes them connected with social but having
same suite whole day
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the same suite whole day
 at work unable them to work efficiently.
Moreover
, here in India, some culture has
special kind
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a special kind
the special kind
special kinds
 of cloths like wearing a special type of cap in Maharastra,
India which
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India, which
make
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makes
 them proud
in
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of
 their religion or feel superior in their tradition. It may happen that people from other culture could not understand it
in
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inside
 out of India and make fun of them while
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 to a different country. In
this
 case, they might feel depressed while pursuing own tradition characteristics. It is
there for
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
therefore
therefor
 necessary to understand different culture with their clothing sense to get mixed up in their society. To conclude, I must say our
traditional
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traditions
 are well known and people are always keeping them alive in different counties and in our own country
too but
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too, but
 sticking same traditional clothes
makes
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make
 people inconvenient in the day to day life.

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