All the people in a company should be treated equally and provided with the same number of vacations in a year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Corporate world
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The corporate world
is full of different types of employment options with different designations, these job profiles require various leave or
vacation
policies. I partially agree with the said notion as several sectors should not provide the same number of vacations to each
employee
and
therefore
should not treat each
employee
equally.
However
, in other sectors where discrimination can be seen clearly, needs parallel
vacation
policies with little to no difference. Running a business in
this
cut-throat competition is not a small issue.
Additionally
, retaining
employee
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employees
an employee
is another problem which mostly caused by differences in the leave policies.
For example
, sectors like agriculture and food
industry
requires different
vacation
for
categorised
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categorising
employees. In my country, most farmers allowed to take a
vacation
in summer, but the supervisors of the fields can take a yearly
vacation
at a different time in monsoon. Supervisors may not get the same number of
vacation
days as compared to farmers. In
this
case, it is justifiable that employers
can not
can not
cannot
treat each
employee
equally particularly in the
mater
a vaguely specified concern
matter
of their leaves. On the opposite side, engineering sectors are following same leave policies throughout a year, no matter who the
employee
is and which position he or she is set on. If there is some difference in leave policies, it is very negligible and is not
questionable
Suggestion
questioned
by the group of employees.
For example
, Information Technology companies do have the one
vacation
policy for all their engineers and
therefore
employees are treated equally, regardless of their designations and duties.
This
is the sector where a minor tweak in the leave policy for certain employees might be considered as a discriminatory decision, because of the nature of the
industry
. To deduce, I believe in the idea that leaves terms can be differ from the
industry
to
industry
and there should not be any
complain
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complaints
regarding not treating
employee
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employees
an employee
the employee
equally.
However
, some corporate sectors and their employees
are believing
Suggestion
believe
in the
equality but
Accept comma addition
equality, but
it totally depends on the nature of the business.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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