All the people in a company should be treated equally and provided with the same number of vacations in a year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Corporate world

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The corporate world

is full of different types of employment options with different designations, these job profiles require various leave or

vacation

policies. I partially agree with the said notion as several sectors should not provide the same number of vacations to each

employee

and

therefore

should not treat each

employee

equally.

However

, in other sectors where discrimination can be seen clearly, needs parallel

vacation

policies with little to no difference. Running a business in

this

cut-throat competition is not a small issue.

Additionally

, retaining

employee

Suggestion

employees

an employee

is another problem which mostly caused by differences in the leave policies.

For example

, sectors like agriculture and food

industry

requires different

vacation

for

categorised

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categorising

employees. In my country, most farmers allowed to take a

vacation

in summer, but the supervisors of the fields can take a yearly

vacation

at a different time in monsoon. Supervisors may not get the same number of

vacation

days as compared to farmers. In

this

case, it is justifiable that employers

can not

cannot

treat each

employee

equally particularly in the

mater

a vaguely specified concern

matter

of their leaves. On the opposite side, engineering sectors are following same leave policies throughout a year, no matter who the

employee

is and which position he or she is set on. If there is some difference in leave policies, it is very negligible and is not

questionable

Suggestion

questioned

by the group of employees.

For example

, Information Technology companies do have the one

vacation

policy for all their engineers and

therefore

employees are treated equally, regardless of their designations and duties.

This

is the sector where a minor tweak in the leave policy for certain employees might be considered as a discriminatory decision, because of the nature of the

industry

. To deduce, I believe in the idea that leaves terms can be differ from the

industry

and there should not be any

complain

Suggestion

complaints

regarding not treating

employee

Suggestion

employees

an employee

the employee

equally.

However

, some corporate sectors and their employees

are believing

Suggestion

believe

in the

equality but

Accept comma addition

equality, but

it totally depends on the nature of the business.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
10Grammar mistakes
 

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

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Clear and correct grammar

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