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Some people think that teenagers should be required to do community service in their free time as this would benefit both the individual teenagers and their society. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The things people do and learn during their early years are one of the factors that shapes their characters.That's why teenagers free time must be planned carefully in order to be used
effeciently
with efficiency; in an efficient manner
efficiently
 for their benefit and the benefit of the society. In my opinion, teenagers should be required to participate in community services for a specific number of hours during their summer or winter holidays and the application of
this
 concept took place in some countries as they demand a specific hours of service
from
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for
 teenagers for them to graduate from
highschool
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high school
 and that showed a remarkable results in teenagers overall behaviour. There are several community services through which teenagers can participate
for example
, they can help in geriatric homes as that will present a good chance for teenagers to learn from their elders and in return they can keep them company and spend some time with them.
Moreover
, teenagers can be asked to help in cleaning their towns and that should teach them to be humble and organised and will leave a clean streets for the society.
Furthermore
, they can help younger orphan and less
fourtinate
having unexpected good fortune
fortunate
 children by helping them in their studies, paying them visits and playing with
them which
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them, which
 helps them to appreciate their
plessings
the formal act of approving
blessings
 and be more compassionate, giving and caring towards others. In conclusion, having teenagers doing community service is very important for the teenagers and for the society as it
help
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helps
 them to grow
in to
expresses motion to a point on, or within, something
into
 more humble, generous,
compassionat
showing or having compassion
compassionate
competent
 and productive individuals.
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