Some people believe that in order for a hobby to be enjoyable, it needs to be difficult in some way. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is nothing new that people like to pursue a

hobby

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in their spare

time

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, while, some people believe that it should be tough in nature, I agree with those who argue that

level

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the level

of difficulty is not the mere criteria for selecting a

hobby

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To begin

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with, some people are adventurous and bold by nature. They like to spend

thier

of them or themselves

their

spare

time

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by doing an activity, which takes a toll on their

mentall

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men tall

physicall

involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit

physical

ability. The reason for

this

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is they like

challanges

take exception to

challenges

, and want to

fulfill

put in effect

fulfil

their crave for head-

ons

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For instance

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, some people prefer to play sudoku, which involves tricky maths and a

lots

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lot

of patience to complete the puzzle.

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, it

prooves

be shown or be found to be

proves

prove

profess

to be a good past

time

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for people who are seeking

sense

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a sense

of accomplishment.

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, I believe that choice of

hobby

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depends on

person’s mood

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a person’s mood

and character. As we

seen

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have seen

saw

above, some

likes

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to take real

challanges

take exception to

challenges

while many likes to just get an entertainment.

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is because they want to relax themselves from the daily routine of their life, and

instead

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of taking up challenges, they like to spend

time

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doing things which help them to reduce their stress. For

examle

an item of information that is typical of a class or group

example

, a person likes to play sudoku

also

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enjoy reading books. Even though, it does not invoke reader for any contest, but just offers an experience within the book. In conclusion,

although

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some people

likes

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to participate in difficult hobbies to

fulfill

put in effect

fulfil

the sense of achievement, I feel that the nature of

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hobby

Suggestion

the hobby

a person select is mostly depends on

person’s mood

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a person’s mood

and character.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

263 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

sense of accomplishment
overcoming obstacles
gratifying
continuous source of enjoyment
relaxing activities
unwind and de-stress
counterproductive
mental break
subjective
personal preference

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