Some people believe that in order for a hobby to be enjoyable, it needs to be difficult in some way. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is nothing new that people like to pursue a
hobby
in their spare
time
.
However
, while, some people believe that it should be tough in nature, I agree with those who argue that
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the level
of difficulty is not the mere criteria for selecting a
hobby
.
To begin
with, some people are adventurous and bold by nature. They like to spend
thier
of them or themselves
their
spare
time
by doing an activity, which takes a toll on their
mentall
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men tall
or
physicall
involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
ability. The reason for
this
is they like
challanges
take exception to
challenges
, and want to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
their crave for head-
ons
.
For instance
, some people prefer to play sudoku, which involves tricky maths and a
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lot
of patience to complete the puzzle.
Thus
, it
prooves
be shown or be found to be
proves
prove
profess
to be a good past
time
for people who are seeking
sense
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a sense
of accomplishment.
However
, I believe that choice of
hobby
depends on
person’s mood
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a person’s mood
and character. As we
seen
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have seen
saw
above, some
likes
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like
to take real
challanges
take exception to
challenges
while many likes to just get an entertainment.
This
is because they want to relax themselves from the daily routine of their life, and
instead
of taking up challenges, they like to spend
time
doing things which help them to reduce their stress. For
examle
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
, a person likes to play sudoku
also
enjoy reading books. Even though, it does not invoke reader for any contest, but just offers an experience within the book. In conclusion,
although
some people
likes
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like
to participate in difficult hobbies to
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
the sense of achievement, I feel that the nature of
hobby
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the hobby
a person select is mostly depends on
person’s mood
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a person’s mood
and character.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sense of accomplishment
  • overcoming obstacles
  • gratifying
  • continuous source of enjoyment
  • relaxing activities
  • unwind and de-stress
  • counterproductive
  • mental break
  • subjective
  • personal preference
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