Some people think that watching sport is wastage of time during leisure time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There are plenty of options available to select from, for a
person
who want to spend his spare
time
.
However
, while some people believe that watching sports is
waste
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a waste
of
time
, I agree
wth
expresses the means used
with
those who argue that spending leisure
time
is
matter
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a matter
of personal choice and watching sports should not be excluded from it.
To begin
with, in
this
fast moving world
time
for fun and relaxation is getting reduced everyday.
Therefore
, some people argue that we should spend available free
time
wisely by
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rejuvenating
ourselves though
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ourselves, though
doing things which are
good
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better
more good
for mental and
physicall
involving the body as distinguished from the mind or spirit
physical
health, rather than just watching sports, which appears to be ineffective in treating them.
For instance
, if a
person
goes for a walk or do yoga,
then
he will
improove
to make better
improve
improved
his health.
Thus
, it is advisable to pursue value added activities in leisure
time
.
However
, I believe that
a
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an
activity
choosen
one who is the object of choice; who is given preference
chosen
choosing
for free
time
should not be rated on its usefulness, but it must be ranked as per persons’s choice.
This
is because some sports allow
person
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people
the person
a person
to get
entertain
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entertained
, but
in addition
to
that it
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that, it
also
helps to reduce their stress, which is very important.
Moreover
, by watching sports, a
person
can feel and
livin
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live-in
living
leaving
competitive spirit, which releases adrenaline and make him contended. In fact, watching sport is often a group event, where family and friends get
togather
in contact with each other or in proximity
together
.
Hence
, it
can be consider
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can be considered
as socializing catalyst. In conclusion,
although
there are plenty of other healthier activities available to go for in leisure
time
, I feel that the level of entertainment
,
Accept space
,
stress reduction and mode of socializing provided by sports
make
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makes
it worth watching.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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