More and more people are becoming seriously overweight.Some people say that price increase of fattening foods will solve this problem.To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

Due to severe changes in our lifestyle

as a result

of modernization, we are now facing mixed results of the same.It is often argued by some people that as obesity has now become

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issue of concern,

hike

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the hike

in prices of

food

containing high fat content will resolve the problem.I strongly agree with

this

idealogy

an orientation that characterizes the thinking of a group or nation

ideology

since it will help in reducing

food

consumption of

such

type of dishes.

Firstly

, due to

change

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changes

in eating habits of people especially young ones

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liking for cuisines containing cheese content or highly saturated foods has increased now a days.People prefer to have fried foods from

store

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the store

as it provides them contentment in comparison to

home made

made or produced in the home or by yourself

homemade

food

.These

highy

to a high degree or extent; favorably or with much respect

highly

saturated foods

gradually deteriorates

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gradually deteriorate

your health as they

dont

do not

don't

have any nutritional value.

Also

, it leads to health problems like heart diseases, stomach issues and the most common obesity, which

further

leads you to become victim of many diseases. So if government institutions impose heavy taxes on

such

products, it will definitely help in refraining people from consuming it frequently, as due to increased prices it will hamper their monthly budget.

For example

, Children will now prefer to eat at their residing places rather than going out at

food

outlets

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due to financial constraints. To conclude with, rise in prices of highly saturated

food

items will lead to

healthy society

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a healthy society

healthy societies

.As it is rightly said, healthy

food

leads to

healthy mind

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a healthy mind

healthy minds

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

231 words

4.50

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Relevant & specific examples

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Topic Vocabulary:

obesity
overweight
fattening foods
calorie-dense
healthier food choices
taxation
economic implications
social implications
subsidies
nutritional education
public health campaigns
nanny state
individual's right
consumer behavior
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