More and more people are becoming seriously overweight.Some people say that price increase of fattening foods will solve this problem.To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

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Due to severe changes in our lifestyle

as a result

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of modernization, we are now facing mixed results of the same.It is often argued by some people that as obesity has now become

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issue of concern,

hike

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the hike

in prices of

food

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containing high fat content will resolve the problem.I strongly agree with

this

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idealogy

an orientation that characterizes the thinking of a group or nation

ideology

since it will help in reducing

food

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consumption of

such

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type of dishes.

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, due to

change

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changes

in eating habits of people especially young ones

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liking for cuisines containing cheese content or highly saturated foods has increased now a days.People prefer to have fried foods from

store

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the store

as it provides them contentment in comparison to

home made

made or produced in the home or by yourself

homemade

food

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.These

highy

to a high degree or extent; favorably or with much respect

highly

saturated foods

gradually deteriorates

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gradually deteriorate

your health as they

dont

do not

don't

have any nutritional value.

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, it leads to health problems like heart diseases, stomach issues and the most common obesity, which

further

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leads you to become victim of many diseases. So if government institutions impose heavy taxes on

such

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products, it will definitely help in refraining people from consuming it frequently, as due to increased prices it will hamper their monthly budget.

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, Children will now prefer to eat at their residing places rather than going out at

food

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outlets

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due to financial constraints. To conclude with, rise in prices of highly saturated

food

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items will lead to

healthy society

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a healthy society

healthy societies

.As it is rightly said, healthy

food

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leads to

healthy mind

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a healthy mind

healthy minds

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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231 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

obesity
overweight
fattening foods
calorie-dense
healthier food choices
taxation
economic implications
social implications
subsidies
nutritional education
public health campaigns
nanny state
individual's right
consumer behavior
preventative measures

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