In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

It is a common view that villagers seemed to be more friendly and
neighborly
exhibiting the qualities expected in a friendly neighbor
neighbourly
than their counterparts who lived in big, modern cities in the old days. While I recognize some potential drawbacks of country life, my belief is that there were more merits. In my opinion, there were four benefits when people lived in a small town.
Firstly
, citizens could enjoy fresh air and clean water because there were no environmental problems
such
as smoke from vehicles and water sources were not polluted.
Secondly
, people who live and work in a small town size would spend less time on waiting for buses, trains or driving cars to somewhere in
city
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the city
a city
because it did not have traffic jams.
For example
, workers where I lived only needed
close
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closure
to
tenminutes
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ten minutes
to
went
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go
to their companies.
Thirdly
, numbers of crimes would decrease,
this
could lead to
created
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creating
a safe environment and gave a better quality of life.
Finally
, people could build good
neighborly
exhibiting the qualities expected in a friendly neighbor
neighbourly
friendship, so they understood each other better. Despite some potential benefits of living in
small city
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a small city
, I think it brought more cons than pros. One reason is that
businesses
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business
opportunities of each
corporations
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corporation
would decrease because of the limited industry. These small village did not bring good living conditions like lack of school and hospital, so young people migrated away to large cities which had bustle life, entertaining places
such
as cinemas or parks. Beside, perhaps employees were able to find good jobs and earned more money,
therefore
, friendship among
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
were not as
connection
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connected
as before, so they did not spend more time for acquainted with people who living near their houses. In conclusion,
although
living in village have so many pros, but it seem to me that it will be better if they live in city
Submitted by downtownman_mmt on

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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