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In recent years, many local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping malls to do their shopping. is this a positive development or a negative development.

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Nowadays, people are happy to go to large shopping complexes to buy the goods they need, because of which small mom and pop stores are losing the business and closing down. These small local shops couldn’t compete with the corporate giants in matching the customer expectations. I believe it is a positive development, because the customers are
real beneficiaries
Suggestion
the real beneficiaries
 at the end. Earlier days, people used to shuffle between the
neighborhood
a surrounding or nearby region
neighbourhood
 stores to buy the groceries or the commodities they need, it was a time taking and a costly effort. People view the giant shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
centre
 as a time and money saver, because they can buy whatever they want in a single place right from the basic goods to the high-end luxury products. In
this
 aspect, small stores can never compete with the corporations and match the customer expectations. Personally, I prefer shopping at a mall rather than
at
Suggestion
in
 a small store.
However
, there is a downside to
this
 trend, store closures can lead to the unemployment crisis. But by improvising, the shop owners can avert
dooms day
(New Testament) day at the end of time following Armageddon when God will decree the fates of all individual humans according to the good and evil of their earthly lives
doomsday
 scenario.
For example
, in India over the past decade huge shopping malls mushroomed in every major city and to compete with them, the native shop owners started providing the home delivery service, goods that customer needs are just a phone call away.
This
 sensible improvisation helped many owners to save their businesses. To conclude, I firmly believe that the customers travelling to a shopping
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
is
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are
 a positive development. It inspires and encourages the companies and the small store owners to be agile and innovative to stay relevant in the business.
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