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Some people say that a person's success is as a result of the way he has been brought up by his parents. Do you agree or disagree?

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A person's
success
 may be
as a result
 of the way they are brought up, but
that is
 not always the case. Yes, habits formed at a young age do shape the lives of young adults, but these can be unlearnt, and do not have much influence on
success
 or failure.
Success
 is of an individual is based on personal efforts.History books are filled with examples of rebellious, non-conforming individuals who have gone on to achieve great
success
.
Parents
Suggestion
Parents'
 roles in
childrens
Suggestion
children's
 lives
is
Suggestion
are
 to discipline, teach respect, and help them navigate life. These tools are necessary for
success but
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success, but
 not vital. Some parents make education everything, and force children to get the highest great disregarding whether the child is academically gifted or not. These children are made to think if they don't ace it in school, they will fail at life. Others focus solely on sports and other extra-curricular activities, which can be detrimental to the growth as a person. Habits are formed at a young age,
however
, they can be unlearnt and
relearnt
learn something again, as after having forgotten or neglected it
relearn
relevant
reliant
. They
bearly
only a very short time before
barely
 have any influence on whether a child can be successful. An individual's grit is what makes them tick. Work ethic is crucial, it may be a trait learn over time, and does not have to be a result of
parents
Suggestion
parent
 training.
Hence in
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Hence, in
 conclusion, in my opinion, parents influence on
success
 is minimal.
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