countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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As a consequence of

globalization

, nations have more chances to trade/interact with each other, and have minimal differences. I think,

although

it is a

valubale

having great material or monetary value especially for use or exchange

valuable

change, but we must acknowledge the impact it will have on

cultural diversity

Suggestion

the cultural diversity

of the

countires

a politically organized body of people under a single government

countries

. On the one hand,

globalization

has brought us a myriad of benefits

as a result

of international uniformity, that means if we can understand other cultures, we can comprehend to cooperate with them, reduce conflicts and positively

augemt

an active and efficient cause; capable of producing a certain effect

agent

businesses.

Firstly

, international similarity

also stand

Suggestion

also stands

has also stood

is also standing

for improved living stand throughout the world, people are not bounded geographical

boudries

the line or plane indicating the limit or extent of something

boundaries

, they can purchase items alike

globaly

throughout the world

globally

For example

, a resident of china can buy things from the USA, which is now possible through online shopping

Accept space

e.g.

amazon

(Greek mythology) one of a nation of women warriors of Scythia (who burned off the right breast in order to use a bow and arrow more effectively)

Amazon

taoba etc.

Accept comma addition

tube, etc.

tube etc.

tuba etc.

toolbar etc.

This

has played a level ground in boosting

international economy

Suggestion

the international economy

On the other hand

globalization

can

also

have some drawbacks, the regional values and cultural diversity is the beauty of the world, due to easy travelling, online

businesesses

a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it

businesses

business

, similar style of infrastructure, local culture and languages can be

assemilated

take up mentally

assimilated

simulated

. Greater countries, like, USA and China can easily influence the smaller countries like,

Veitnam

a communist state in Indochina on the South China Sea; achieved independence from France in 1945

Vietnam

For example

younger

Suggestion

young

veitnamese

the Mon-Khmer language spoken in Vietnam

Vietnamese

are more impressed by the

hollywood

the film industry of the United States

Hollywood

and

chinese

a native or inhabitant of Communist China or of Nationalist China

Chinese

movie culture, resulting in decreased appreciation of their ancient culture plays. In conclusion, even though,

globalization

is beneficial for all people around the world, its

drawbacks of

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drawbacks, of

reducing cultural diversity, outweigh its benefits.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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235 words

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

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Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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globalization
diversity
homogenization
cultural assimilation
global connection
local businesses
economic impact
consumerism
standardization
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