countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. do you think it is a positive or negative development?

As a consequence of
globalization
, nations have more chances to trade/interact with each other, and have minimal differences. I think,
although
it is a
valubale
having great material or monetary value especially for use or exchange
valuable
change, but we must acknowledge the impact it will have on
cultural diversity
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the cultural diversity
of the
countires
a politically organized body of people under a single government
countries
. On the one hand,
globalization
has brought us a myriad of benefits
as a result
of international uniformity, that means if we can understand other cultures, we can comprehend to cooperate with them, reduce conflicts and positively
augemt
an active and efficient cause; capable of producing a certain effect
agent
businesses.
Firstly
, international similarity
also stand
Suggestion
also stands
has also stood
is also standing
for improved living stand throughout the world, people are not bounded geographical
boudries
the line or plane indicating the limit or extent of something
boundaries
, they can purchase items alike
globaly
throughout the world
globally
.
For example
, a resident of china can buy things from the USA, which is now possible through online shopping
.
Accept space
.
e.g.
amazon
(Greek mythology) one of a nation of women warriors of Scythia (who burned off the right breast in order to use a bow and arrow more effectively)
Amazon
,
taoba etc.
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tube, etc.
tube etc.
tuba etc.
toolbar etc.
This
has played a level ground in boosting
international economy
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the international economy
.
On the other hand
,
globalization
can
also
have some drawbacks, the regional values and cultural diversity is the beauty of the world, due to easy travelling, online
businesesses
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
businesses
business
, similar style of infrastructure, local culture and languages can be
assemilated
take up mentally
assimilated
simulated
. Greater countries, like, USA and China can easily influence the smaller countries like,
Veitnam
a communist state in Indochina on the South China Sea; achieved independence from France in 1945
Vietnam
.
For example
,
younger
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young
veitnamese
the Mon-Khmer language spoken in Vietnam
Vietnamese
are more impressed by the
hollywood
the film industry of the United States
Hollywood
and
chinese
a native or inhabitant of Communist China or of Nationalist China
Chinese
movie culture, resulting in decreased appreciation of their ancient culture plays. In conclusion, even though,
globalization
is beneficial for all people around the world, its
drawbacks of
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drawbacks, of
reducing cultural diversity, outweigh its benefits.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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