many museums charge for admission while others are free. do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museum outweigh the disadvantages?

Museums are educational places which are beneficial for the people and the societies.
Now a days
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Nowadays
, many
museum
charge fee for entrance into the
museum
. I know it can have
negetive impact
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a negative impact
negative impact
on the
people but
Accept comma addition
people, but
, its pros are far more than its cons.
To begin
with, charging tickets for admission to the museums can have
deterimental
(sometimes followed by 'to') causing harm or injury
detrimental
effects for the people, society and the
museum
itself. From the people's perspective, they are discouraged to learn the valuable information specially poors, from the society perspective, easy access
tothe
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to the
important subjects of the history and culture is compromised, and from the museums own opinion, they are being unable to educate the visitors.
This
can lead a learning gap and ultimate shutting down of
such
public places of paramount importance. Despite aforementioned
disadvantes
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantages
, I am convinced by the idea of applying admission fee to the
museum
. In
this
way,
museum
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the museum
museums
can
gernerate
bring into existence
generate
money to cover its overhead business, personal cost, equipment and pay for
electicity
a physical phenomenon associated with stationary or moving electrons and protons
electricity
and water bills. By
this
method, museums can generate their own revenue and will be better able to invest
on
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in
the improvement of the place, add
variety
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a variety
of new items, provide more facilities to the visitors and keep the place tidy and clean.
For instance
, from my own experience, those museums which charge entry ticket are more well organised than the free ones. To conclude, it is an undeniable fact that, putting
burden
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the burden
a burden
of admission charges on the common people sounds not very attractive, but it can offer
myriad
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a myriad
of benefits to the visitors by improving
facilties
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
offered to them, resulting in wonderful experiences.
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