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Topic 4: Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female study in every subject. Do you agree or disagree。

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Education is the right
to
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of
 every individual. It is considered by many that institutions should consider a balanced ratio of men and women to be admitted in every course. From my point of view
,
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,
 I oppose
this
 as admissions should given purely on merit
bases
a relation that provides the foundation for something
basis
 and certain professions are
gender
 specific.
To begin
 with, universities should grant admissions on past academic records.
This
 will ensure that equal opportunities are provided and deserving candidates will be enrolled.
Moreover
, student will be competitive and they will word hard to achieve higher grades at school.
For instance
, a female student is the best candidate for a course but it would be wrong to reject her in favour of a male student who has lower grades and qualifications. .
Thus having
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Thus, having
 a transparent way to select a candidate for
course
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the course
a course
 is essential.
However
, some people believe that having a balanced number of boys and girls will provide equal job opportunities
to
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for
 them in future. But
this
 does not hold true as certain profession demand either of the
gender
 to perform. Professions like nursing consider female as they are sensitive and caring in human nature which is essential to treat
patients whereas
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patients, whereas
 in mining industries males are preferred as it requires muscular strength.
Therefore
, providing admissions to equalise without looking at the capability to perform will have no meaning. To recapitulate, despite people having varying beliefs on
merits
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the merits
 of admitted exactly the same number of
gender
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genders
 in all subjects, in my opinion, I disagree
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 it as territory education should consider their academic grades and that some job demands
gender
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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