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When a country develops its technology, the traditional skills and ways of life die out. It is pointless to try and keep them alive. To what extent you agree or disagree with the statement? You should use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your argument with examples and relevant evidence.

#country #technology #skills #life #support #argument #evidence
Is technology making our lives easier? In recent
years technological
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years, technological
 revolution has brought about many changes in our lifestyles in
such
 a
way
 that most jobs depend on a piece of modern equipment
.
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.
 It has been argued that it is useless to try
cling
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to cling
 on to the traditional ways of life.There is no doubt in my mind that when a country progress in
technology changes
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technology, changes
 comes along instantly and it would be
a
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an
 error if its benefits were rejected.
Firstly
, nowadays countries that have developed a large amount of technology
such
 as medical equipments
,
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,
 machinery, computer software, communications
,
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,
 robots and so forth are the ones that have shifted its manner of working in a positive and efficient
way
.
For instance
, at least ten steps were needed in order to make a shoe
therefore
, a large amount of time was needed and needless to say that a lot of money was spent on wages.
As a result
,
shoes
Suggestion
the shoes
 were high-priced and many people could not afford it.
However
, thanks to the modern machinery just a bit of time is needed and just a few employers are essential so as to make a shoe.
Secondly
, in terms of health
,
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,
recent research
indicates
Suggestion
has indicated
 that never before have medicine progressed so quickly and countries where most of their budget was invested
on
Suggestion
in
 medical
development
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development, such
such
 as Germany
,
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,
a vast number of patients got better results when they were examined with the medical equipment. In
this
way
 doctors and nurses were fascinated with the results.
Moreover
, some doctors started to be aware more of new medical investigation around the world in order to encourage governments to invest more money in electronic medical devices in
this
way
,
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,
engineers would be able to create more new medical equipments. To sum up, countries that
often keeps
Suggestion
often keep
 on inventing new things and adding up to technological inventions are constantly changing the
way
 they do things and it would be meaningless if people in those countries kept doing things
old-fashioned
Suggestion
the old-fashioned way
way
.
Submitted by Serhii Baraniuk on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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