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some people are born tobe leaders,while others believe leadership can be learnt.Discuss both views and give opinion

#people #tobe #leaders #leadership #learnt
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It is broadly believed that being
leader
 is innate
although
 others think that
everybody
 can learn it who want passionately.I am convinced that it depends on
individuals
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the individuals
 themselves
,
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,
both statements can be truth. On the one hand, there are several reasons why some people are persuaded that it is impossible to learn how to be
a
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an
 honest
leader
.
First
 of all
,
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,
it is hard to learn
ledarship
the activity of leading
leadership
 because
leader
 means that someone who can easily understand people
,
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,
 so patient
,
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,
 to make
everybody
 who work with you
happy
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happily
.
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.
It does not
reqiure
require as useful, just, or proper
require
 only high qualification, but
also
encounteer
come together
encounter
encountered
encounters
 real life issues
.
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.
For example
, some leaders who create a new company or organization can
faced
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face
 a lot of
difficulties but
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difficulties, but
 a real
leader
 can solve them with a great patient.Society
assume
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assumes
 that these
type
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types
 of people born to be a
leader
.
However
, they
dont
do not
don't
 know the fact that these people have faced with many
dicreases
the territorial jurisdiction of a bishop
dioceses
decreases
.
On the other hand
, remain people with the right routing
everybody
 can become
leader
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a leader
leaders
.Reading popular
leadership
 books written by famous CEOs in the world help people to increase
leadership
 skills. Right from primary school
,
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,
children are taught to lead a group discussion or act as an arbitrator in a debate.
This
 plays a role in forming
leadership
 capacity in every individual. In conclusion
,
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,
both views have their own merits.I am convinced that
everybody
 can learn
leadership
 if
thisperson
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this person
 want it with
enthuaism
a feeling of excitement
enthusiasm
 and never give up its decision
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