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Wirte an essay to an educated reader to discuss your opinions about solutions to Internet addiction. Include reasons and any revelant examples to support your answer. You should write at least 250 words.

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The twenty -
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 century is already turning out to be the century of the Internet. One of the growing areas of concern is that of Internet
addiction
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. An Internet addict is someone who is unable to control his or her own use of the Internet and whose
behaviors
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviours
 threaten to overwhelm his or her normal life. My essay will discuss solution to Internet
addiction
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. The
first
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 possible solution to deal with Internet addition might be to restrict the use of mobile phone. In recent years, people should take part in other activities
such
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 as: listening to music, playing guitar, playing football,...
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, people can join some clubs in order to improve their communication
instead
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 of Internet
addiction
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. A
second
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 measure to combat
adiction
being abnormally tolerant to and dependent on something that is psychologically or physically habit-forming (especially alcohol or narcotic drugs)
addiction
abduction
addictions
 would be to provide more job opportunities for
addict
Suggestion
the addict
addicts
an addict
.
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 means that
addict
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the addict
an addict
addicts
 has to work hard in order to forget to
acess
the right to enter
access
assess
 the Internet.
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, people can take part in some social activities
such
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 as doing charity, voluntary work in the community so as to be taken away from the computer screen and relax their mind.
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,
this
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 problem could be addressed by educating. People should take care their lives. They need to heighten public awareness of
addiction
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 problems. Because it has been a head-aching issue in recent years. In conclusion, the above - mentioned facts have outlined the measure of
this
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 issue. The presented suggestions would be very good steps toward solving them. People should have
further
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 consideration
on
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of
this
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 issue.
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