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Universities and colleges are now offering qualifications through distance learning from the Internet rather than teachers in the classroom. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Recently, long-
distance
 classes
instead
 of several
face
 to
face
 classes in school since the development of the internet technology. In my opinion, the merits are far more than the demerits of the change. It is true that the atmosphere of the
distance
class
 is not as good as the
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
. It may reduce the quality of the training. People usually take the online
class
 at home. Unfortunately, there are numerous distractions to study in the accommodation compared to study in the classroom.
For example
, if the
new born
recently born
newborn
 baby
start
Suggestion
starts
 to cry, no matter what the parents are busy with, they have to put down the work and start to take care their baby. In
this
 case, how could
them
people in general
they
 concentrate on studying?
However
, a large number of
cons
a flat metal piece (usually a disc) used as money
coins
,
such
 as reducing transport
time
 and being more flexible, exit.
First
 of all, the
time
 cost
in
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of
 the transport
for
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of
class
 is a kind
of waste especially
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of waste, especially
 for employees. Except the working
time
, people usually don’t have
lot
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lots
 of leisure
time
 what they can spend for education.
Time
 is really valuable.
For instance
, it is not cost-effective to take two
hour
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hours
 to drive for a one hour
class
 when people just have 6 hours to sleep.
Furthermore
, people don’t need to attend the
distance
 courses in the particular
time
. In
this
 case,
distance
 courses
is
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are
 a good way for people who don’t have a
fix
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fixed
 schedule to get the qualifications from training. To sum up, even though people may learn more knowledge in
face
 to
face
 course, yet the merits of
distance
 learning definitely outweigh the drawbacks.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unparalleled flexibility
  • democratizes education
  • geographically isolated
  • personal circumstances
  • cost-effectiveness
  • accommodation
  • commuting
  • self-motivated learning
  • self-discipline
  • time management
  • direct interaction
  • feelings of isolation
  • quality and recognition
  • inferior
  • technical issues
  • digital divide
  • reliable technology
  • underprivileged
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