The best way to teach children to cooperate is through team sports at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#children #team #sports #school

modern age

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the modern age

cooperation

has become more essential. Some parents believe that their kids should join more

team

sports in

school

since it is the most effective way to train the students to cooperate with others well. I agree with

this

opinion to some extent. Attending

team

sports at

school

has

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crucial effect

for

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educating the students about

team

work

skill.

First

of all, it’s true that

school

is the place that kids spend almost of his time. Specifically, the average time for children to stay at

school

is about 8 hours.

Thus

school

is the best place for children to learn knowledge and make

progresses

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progress

Secondly

, ,

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it is always required that students should complete the homework independently that they rarely need to cooperate with classmates. If the duties for kids are

listen

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listening

teachers’ presentations and do the homework, they don’t have the opportunity to practise their

cooperation

On the contrary

team

sports

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are

useful to educate the students how to deal with teammates.

For example

, If the players want to win, how could they don’t in the basketball games?

However

, as far as I believe, playing sports is not best and there are several better ways to improve the

cooperation

for children. On the one hand, there are a few drawbacks in playing sports at

school

Team

sports are not suitable for every student.

For instance

, the thinner kids usually is not

addict

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addicted

to score compared with the stronger ones. On the

another

not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied

other

hand, carrying out several projects by a group of students is better to learn how to cooperate.

Firstly

, the situation in

this

case is more likely the situation in the

work

. It can help students know better what they should do in their future

work

Secondly

, in the research students can get more academic information. To sum up, in order to get the progress related to

cooperation

, students not only should attend the sports at

school

, but

also need

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also needs

to carry out the

team

work

research.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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