The US film industry has too much influence on the film industry around the world. Governments have a duty to invest money in their own film industries to protect and develop their cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Hollywood largely influenced other film industries across the world.

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, it is believed that the central government ought to invest capital

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production

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the production

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of local

films

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safeguard

the culture, and represent it globally. I agree with

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notion, considering the fact that every nation has its own identity, language, morals and values that are inculcated into

films

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, investment in domestic production houses

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worldwide recognition; contributing to the national GDP and generating employment opportunities. First and foremost, the cultural representation of every country is essential because the languages, morals and values are different for different nationalities.

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Amercians

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have varied

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cultural

values than Chinese, and the language and dialect

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very different between the people of

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nationalities. Movies and shows are a major source of entertainment for individuals.

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, they play an important role in

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of the country and the government should help

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culture through

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, in order to attract

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audience, globalization of local talent

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crucial, as not only does it increase the country's GDP but

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creates new employment opportunities.

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, Bollywood is the second

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industry after Hollywood, and ever since achieving a global status, Bollywood has helped in

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of India in all aspects.

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, as more and more movies are released, more crew is required.

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helps in revenue generation. In conclusion, in my opinion, the government should be accountable for promoting local

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Films

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represent cultures and protect them for newer generations.

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, they

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sustain

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the representation

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of talents on international platforms, benefiting the economy as well.

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Topic Vocabulary:

Americanisation
Cultural imperialism
Local cinema
Cultural diversity
Cultural homogenization
Film subsidies
National identity
Artistic expression
Blockbusters
Cultural preservation

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