Competitiveness amoung high school students should be encouraged. Do you agree or disagree?

These days, many schools are increasing competition and exams to enhance educational and non-educational interest in their students. I agree with the positive actions for
pupil’s bright future
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the pupil’s bright future
. There are several
reason
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reasons
why being competent is so much important in school-age
life
for children.
Firstly
, It
help
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helps
student
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students
the student
a student
to develop their personality. To elaborate it, competition
always demand
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always demands
from students for critical thinking, taking responsibility and guiding other colleague to
achive
to gain with effort
achieve
achieves
the same goal.
For example
, a cricket match between two teams of school kids require attention of planning of allocating team members on the ground to save from the targeted runs.
In addition
, the match needs one leader to take the responsibility to manage the team accurately to win in the
compition
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
. All of
this
are
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is
benificial part
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the beneficial part
beneficial part
a beneficial part
in
develop
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developing
own personality in the pupils.
Secondly
, taking part in the
compition
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
will increase
interest
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the interest
of
student
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students
the student
in study or in any sports activity. Fortunately, sometime
this
deep digging involvement in a particular interest becomes
life
time professionalism for them.
For instance
, to achieve
goal
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goals
the goal
a goal
in the exam, students require to research on
particular subject
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the particular subject
particular subjects
a particular subject
to score high.
This
research sometime makes pupil more curious about that subject and encourage them to do master in the same, and at
last
they are adopting it as a profession for their
life
such
as
wild-
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a wildlife photographer
wildlife photographer
wildlife photographers
life
photographer.
Lastly
, profit from
compition
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
help students to cover their financial burden. At the end of any
compition
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
compilation
compulsion
, it is always there a prize for the winner. It might be in the form of cash reward or a
scholorship
financial aid provided to a student on the basis of academic merit
scholarship
. Pupils from
poor financial family background
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the poor financial family background
can survive from their own educational
expences
amounts paid for goods and services that may be currently tax deductible (as opposed to capital expenditures)
expenses
experiences
with
this
winning price. In conclusion, conducting and encouraging students to take part in the
compition
a business relation in which two parties compete to gain customers
competition
completion
at the early age of school
life
can provide a great addition to their personal, professional and financial
life
.
Moreover
,
it
it is
it's
concrete them to be ready for the future.

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