Some people think that coins and paper money will vanish in a few years. We will only use plastic cards or some other form of electronic currency. Is this a positive or negative development?

The advances in modern technology allow us to modify or change the funds' systems used for trade. While many individuals believe in complete disappearance of coin and notes in
future
Suggestion
the future
and are ready to welcome alternate options
such
as
plastic
cards or electronic
currency
, I strongly argue against
this
trend because; not all individuals are well versed with electronic transactions and
also
, coins and paper are environment-friendly. It is indeed difficult to cope up with the loss of the current
currency
system in the coming years.
This
is because not all people are educated enough to understand an online transaction method.
For instance
, the older and illiterate people might need the help of others to carry out a simple payment. As a consequence,
this
can lead to an elevated rate of cyber crimes.
Furthermore
, an electronic
currency
that will require the Internet connection, advance mobiles, which poor people cannot afford, can create a problem. Another reason I feel
plastic
cards shouldn’t be considered as
currency
in the coming time is that they are not environment-friendly. Production of a huge lot
plastic
card will require an enormous amount of the same to be made which can put an extra burden on the surroundings. To explain, we can easily recycle the paper notes and melt the metals to form other
coins but
Accept comma addition
coins, but
recycled
plastic
cannot again be used to make the same cards. As discussed above, I stand firm with my opinion that states use of the
plastic
cards or an electronic
currency
in the future and obsoleting
current
Suggestion
currency
notes and coins is a negative development since it can create difficulties for poor, illiterate and elderly people and
also
, add
burden
Suggestion
a burden
on the environment.
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