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You have recently ordered an item from the internet, but are not happy with the purchase. Write to the company. In your letter Describe what you purchased Explain why you are not happy with the purchase Tell them what you would like them to do about the situation

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Respected Sir, Writing
this
 letter to describe my dissatisfaction
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 a product of your brand I bought from an online shopping website. I ordered one of
Bluetooth
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 Headphones in your SONY WIO series from the Amazon on fourteenth of April and received it on
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 i.e. two days before in a good condition. When I started using it, I admired it has a really good sound quality.
However
, yesterday, while turning on the headphones, the power button broke off. You can imagine how surprising it felt, as the headphones are quite expensive yet have
such
 bad quality material. I got assistance from
customer
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Amazon but he refused to give a refund or replacement, as their policy does not allow it.
This
 is the reason I am requesting you to kindly replace my set with a new one or I shall get back my refund of 100$. Hope to get a prompt reply from you. Yours sincerely, Vishwayani
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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