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happiness is considered very important in life. why it is difficult to define? what factors are important in achieving happiness? give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#happiness #life #factors
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The ultimate goal of any human being is, to be happy. It can be out of materialistic result or just a gesture from
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
person
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. Everybody thrives to find
happiness
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 in their life. The
definition
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 of
happiness
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 can vary from
person
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 to
person
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. In general, it is always difficult to define any kind of emotion. Every
person
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 has their own
definition
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 of
happiness
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. So it becomes really challenging to define the emotion.
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, if a
person
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 wins lottery money, that would bring him
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happiness whereas
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happiness, whereas
 for someone spending time with their children would bring
happiness
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. Some
seeks
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seek
have sought
are seeking
happiness
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 in
form
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the form
 of material, like buying things and money could make them happy while others find
happiness
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 with
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person
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people
the person
a person
.
Being with their loved ones bring
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Will with their loved ones bring
 them joy. On the whole, the
definition
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 of
happiness
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 can differ and makes it even harder to explain. There are so many factors that can contribute to achieve
happiness
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. One of them is a "
person
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's character".
This
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 goes by a famous saying - what goes around, comes around - Karma. If someone
show
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shows
is showing
 their kind to everyone it will definitely
comes
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come
 back to them. Being rude can only bring pain to them and in a long run it could affect them mentally as well.
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secondly
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Secondly
, acceptance is the key to
happiness
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.
Accept
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Except
 for what you are and who you are.
one
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One
 of the important factor for
happiness
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 is to realise and acceptance
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
instead
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 of trying to adapt someone else's
lifestyele
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
.
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, A man from a middle income group could be happier with his family when compared to the rich. It all depends on the way we accept our life. In conclusion, it is always important to be happy in life. The
definition
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 might
vary but
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vary, but
 the feeling remains the same. Those are some of the factors that are responsible for
happiness
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.
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