In many countries, a small number of people earn extremely high salaries. Some people believe that this is good for the country, but others think that government should not allow salaries above certain level. Discuss the view and give your opinion.

Every
employee
receives
salary
based on their skills and work experience which is the common procedure. In many countries, a fewer number of people earn extremely high salaries, some people believe that
this
good for the
country whereas
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country, whereas
others think that
government
Suggestion
the government
should fix a
salary
range above which the
employee
shouldn’t get paid. Many people believe that a smaller group of people earning higher salaries can contribute to the country’s development in
form
Suggestion
the form
of taxes. These smaller
group
Suggestion
groups
can help in maintaining the
economical
Suggestion
economic
pyramid balanced.
For example
: if a company is in the process of hiring a candidate for the job, the company would definitely hire someone who has
good level
Suggestion
a good level
of experience in the field. Certain people demand higher salaries, while not only benefits the
employee but
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employee, but
as well as the employer in the long run.
Hence
it is necessary to give a higher amount of
salary
for
deserving
Suggestion
the deserving
. There
is
Suggestion
are
have been
always two sides to a coin, though the former statement clearly explains the need for higher salaries, there are people who
wants
Suggestion
want
equality in the
salary
range which is not practical. Not every fresher and manager
are paid
Suggestion
is paid
equally in any sector.
For example
: if a candidate is offered the work of managerial duties and was paid very low income, he wouldn’t prefer to take the job, because there is a heavy demand in the work load.
This
would affect the company and
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
indirectly it affects
nation
Suggestion
the nation
as well. In
conlusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, every
employee regardless
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employee, regardless
of their group,
that is
either smaller or larger should be paid according to their ability and performance. In my opinion,
it
it is
it's
always good to get paid based on the performance.
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