Additional physical exercise classes in schools is the best way to solve overweight issues in health care departments.

There has been a recent pressure in health care systems to solve heath regards resulting from
substantial surge
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a substantial surge
in the number of overweight people. It is believed that with the advent of additional physical education classes in school syllabus will be the most efficient method to overcome
this
pressing issue. I agree that cultivating
habit
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habits
of regular exercise contributes to physical fitness. But
in addition
,
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,
combined benefits of
balanced
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a balanced diet
diet
and physical workout accounts for overall better results.
First
of all, physical activity leads to burning of unnecessary fat getting accumulated in the body. By inducing the practice of routine physical activity right from
younger age
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a younger age
younger ages
, it becomes a habit for children to continue it for their lifetime. Physical activity can be of any form,
for instance
, a sport that
invlove
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involves
involve
all body muscles or stretching exercises with guidance of staff.
This
way we are nurturing the thought of
importance
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the importance
of living
healthy lifestyle
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a healthy lifestyle
to children.
Secondly
, it is not only physical exercise that can keep children hail and healthy, balanced
diet
also
plays a vital role for physical fitness. Balanced
diet
includes intake of all types of
nutrients namely
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nutrients, namely
,
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,
vitamins
,
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,
minerals
,
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,
proteins, fat and carbohydrates in prescribed proportions. There should always be a balance between the intake of the number of calories and the number of calories spent. So
,
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,
proper ingestion of food
also
attributes in reducing health regards relating to overweight issues. To conclude, I believe that the aggregated result of maintaining a regular physical regime and a balanced
diet
would solve the root cause of issues arising due to overweight problems.

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