1) In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country, while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

Nowadays more
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Nowadays, more
and more people are struggling around the world to make
money
in order to support their families. In some nations people could make a lot of
money
which may cause positive prospects
to
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for
companies, individuals and countries, whereas some people think that government should reduce high salaries.
This
essay will examine both sides of
arguments
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the arguments
.
To begin
with,
first
of all increasing salaries may cause good lifestyle to citizen and strengthen the economy of the country.
For
instance if
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instance, if
people earn high salaries
then
definitely they will spend more
money
to buy some expensive products
as a result
not only he improve his living standard
also
companies business will grow
as a result
economy become stronger.
In addition
countries employment rate will increase and
consequently
crime rate
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the crime rate
will be reduce
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will be reduced
.
Secondly
, in
case
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the case
of keeping
wage
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wages
in limit from federal side
this
may cause some negative consequences
such
as income growing of income disparities, where some people will earn more
money
and some will less as
result
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a result
it is very harmful for a country to stable their economy and
fulfill
put in effect
fulfil
the need of every citizen.
For example
the average assets of American top 10 richest men are 90% higher than average income of all citizens of the country,
hence
unemployment rate
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the unemployment rate
increasing significantly which may
resultant
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result
to crime at the end.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

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  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
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  • In general

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