Some people think that people moving to a new country should accept new culture in the foreign country rather than living as a separate minority group with different lifestyle. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays it is a trend to move and live in another country among educated peoples. Owing to
this
some
closely similar or comparable in kind or quality or quantity or degree
same
country has become cosmopolitan societies. In the current
scenario some
Accept comma addition
scenario, some
people opined that immigrants should gel up with host nation where others says to live as a minority with own lifestyle. I agree that immigrants should accept
new
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a new culture
culture
. In
this
essay I shall put forth my arguments to support my view.
First
of all, considering it as paramount need, to get employment one need to understand and follow
customs
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the customs
of the host country. Nations have different work cultures and ethics, which are part of their business
strategies
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strategy
,
therefore
, it is necessary to accept before accepting
job
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the job
a job
.
Secondly
, new society
have
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has
different food, attire and festivals. Adopting
such
social attributes makes people more knowledgeable and it
also
broadens the horizon,
consequently
it makes life more meaningful. Apart from
this
, as human is a social animal, accepting
new
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a new culture
culture
gives more opportunities to interact with local people and to build rapport with them, which
finally
forms harmonious and productive relations.
Finally
more people with common
culture
makes less conflicts and social issues which is good for maintaining law and order.
On the other hand
, keeping own
culture
and tradition alive is
also
essential. It give
sense
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a sense
of identity.
Additionally
, own
culture
provides
comforts
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comfort
and confidence. Individuals
also
can avoid
culture
shock by living as
separate minority group
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a separate minority group
with own lifestyle. In conclusion, I would like to reiterate that accepting new cultures and customs provides people with more opportunities related to work and socializing,
therefore
it is advisable to accept it.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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