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Violence in society increases when more violence is shown on television. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#violence #society #increases #television
Back in the days, the word violence seems like a taboo word to people,
however
, nowadays, people appear to be indifferent about the
crime
 that has been circulating around the society. Recent studies showed that individuals who
constantly watches
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constantly watch
 violent movies and news about
crime
 shown in the television has more
crime
 records than those who doesn't. I am strongly
agreed
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agree
 that violent shows that appeared in television is the prominent cause of violence in the country. Beginning of the World War days, the
mankind’s'
all of the living human inhabitants of the earth
mankind
 opinion on entertainment changed drastically. They thought that
suffering
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the suffering
 and
impact
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the impact
 of the war should be known by all over the world in order to give awareness to society
on
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about
 the hardships that people face during war.
Nevertheless
, some people think it
otherwise
. Shockingly, they think that it is some sort of entertainment where people can relieve stress. What makes it even worse, the young ones idolised TV personality in those brutal shows
such
 as WEE and Smackdown where people are paid to hit each other.
Therefore
,
young
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younger
 generation begins to follow their footsteps by terrorizing the public as it is a cool trend for them.
Moreover
, some assume that taking revenge and murdering people will make them famous. There were many proofs that psychopathic murderers kill or
threat
something considered choice to eat
treat
 people so that they can appear
in
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on
 television screen. Ironically, seeing themselves appear in the screen makes them feel important. It doesn't matter to them whether people hate them or not, if the media giving attention to them.
This
 may lead others to follow these criminals' footsteps to grab attention media's
attention making
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attention, making
 them a 'star'. In conclusion,
media
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the media
 portrays violence to get fame and popularity has
leads
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led
lead
 to more crimes in the society. The media industry should stop publicising these types of shows to curb the
crime
 happening in the country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • media influence
  • desensitization
  • mimic
  • impressionable
  • copycat phenomenon
  • aggression
  • correlational
  • causal link
  • violent crime rates
  • educational role
  • glorification
  • cultural norms
  • social factors
  • community norms
  • regulatory measures
  • broadcasting restrictions
  • content rating systems
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