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Topic-New technology have changed the way children spend their free time .Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Unwary young viewers is being easily swayed by captivating
technology
such
 as
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computers
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mobile phones and television
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which has altered their development and quality of life. On the whole
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the latest
technology
 has changed the way children spend their off hours. Undoubtedly
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the drawbacks of these changes
has
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have
 deleterious effects on the youngsters than the benefits
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which
i
refers to the speaker or writer
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 would explain with reasons and examples in following paragraphs. To embark
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with the new technological effects on the today’s young generation
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which make them addicted of being more reliant on the
technology
 for sake of entertainment they neglected engagement in the outdoor activities
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this
 may result living of sedentary lifestyle which is highly detrimental for their physical health
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for instance
; in recent research it is evaluated, that screen form the device
such
 as television mobile and computer are emitting a blue light that can cause headache
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eye strain and irritations for children’s
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furthermore
in addition
Furthermore
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the blue light cause sleeplessness by suppressing the hormone melatonin.
On the other hand
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technology
change
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changes
 the way teenagers socialise and interact in the society or with their peer groups
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because
advancement
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the advancement
 of gadgets make them obstinate and grumpy
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 Many kids are spending most of their time playing video games, watching television and using social networks like
facebook
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Facebook
, the more time they spend using these technologies, the more time they spend alone. If a child has poor social skills, they will find it hard to deal with people when they grow up and
this
 can be harmful to their lives and careers in the long run. People who are not social find it hard to mix with society and in most
cases they
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cases, they
surfer
undergo or be subjected to
suffer
 from depression, which in a lot of cases results in committing suicide.
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 profound, with the technological advantages for the adults
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where it has limitations it is imperative
also
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Technology
help
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helps
 the school going’s into their assignments and make them
upto
 dates towards the world’s ongoing achievement The reason
technology
 is
make
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making
 world evolutionary the younger generation is the key to develop the nation they must aware be towards the advancement. In conclusion
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try to explain the young adolescents the negative effects that
technology
 can have
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this
 will help them to understand why it’s important
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Instead
 of prohibiting technological use altogether, set daily limits for how long children can use
technology
 each day. Talk with them about what seems reasonable and keep their schedules in mind.
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