Topic-New technology have changed the way children spend their free time .Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Unwary young viewers is being easily swayed by captivating
technology
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as
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computers
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mobile phones and television
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which has altered their development and quality of life. On the whole
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the latest
technology
has changed the way children spend their off hours. Undoubtedly
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the drawbacks of these changes
has
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have
deleterious effects on the youngsters than the benefits
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which
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would explain with reasons and examples in following paragraphs. To embark
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with the new technological effects on the today’s young generation
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which make them addicted of being more reliant on the
technology
for sake of entertainment they neglected engagement in the outdoor activities
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this
may result living of sedentary lifestyle which is highly detrimental for their physical health
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for instance
; in recent research it is evaluated, that screen form the device
such
as television mobile and computer are emitting a blue light that can cause headache
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eye strain and irritations for children’s
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furthermore
in addition
Furthermore
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the blue light cause sleeplessness by suppressing the hormone melatonin.
On the other hand
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technology
change
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changes
the way teenagers socialise and interact in the society or with their peer groups
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because
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the advancement
of gadgets make them obstinate and grumpy
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Many kids are spending most of their time playing video games, watching television and using social networks like
facebook
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, the more time they spend using these technologies, the more time they spend alone. If a child has poor social skills, they will find it hard to deal with people when they grow up and
this
can be harmful to their lives and careers in the long run. People who are not social find it hard to mix with society and in most
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cases, they
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undergo or be subjected to
suffer
from depression, which in a lot of cases results in committing suicide.
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profound, with the technological advantages for the adults
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where it has limitations it is imperative
also
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Technology
help
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helps
the school going’s into their assignments and make them
upto
dates towards the world’s ongoing achievement The reason
technology
is
make
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making
world evolutionary the younger generation is the key to develop the nation they must aware be towards the advancement. In conclusion
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try to explain the young adolescents the negative effects that
technology
can have
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this
will help them to understand why it’s important
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Instead
of prohibiting technological use altogether, set daily limits for how long children can use
technology
each day. Talk with them about what seems reasonable and keep their schedules in mind.
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