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Doctors in many countries concerned that people are not getting enough physical exercise. What causes this? How this can be solved?

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These days, people aren't getting enough physical workout, which is a serious issue raised by
health
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 care professionals.
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 is majorly due to advancement in technology and insufficient time, which can be resolved by creating awareness among individuals. In
this
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 modern era, technology is booming and plays a predominant role in mankind which made the life of a human more easier as well as lazier.
people
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People
 are able to get things done by just sitting at home which makes them couch potatoes. Due to lack of physical movements, which eventually leads to certain
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 disorder like
obesity which
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obesity, which
 is a serious issue currently prevailing in the world and another major reason is lack of time to think about their
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 since they are busy in competing.
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, a recent survey has revealed that 80% of people are facing overweight issues in a country due to lack of
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 as well as imbalanced diet.
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, there are certain measures which can be implemented to resolve the issue
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.
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 is by creating awareness regarding the benefits of
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, yoga and other fitness programmes and
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 the downsides of not following a fitness Regime
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Secondly by
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Secondly, by
 taking frequent breaks between their work to stretch
themselves particularly
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themselves, particularly
 for individuals who work before
computer
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the computer
 for a longer period of time.
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, from my own experience, I have seen a lot of people who are consistent in their workouts are experiencing healthy mind and Soul as well as a successful life. To conclude people have to consider
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the doctor's advice
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 as doing frequent
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.
short
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Short
 breaks in between work, which actually has a lot of
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 benefits and
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 leads to a fruitful future. Through a systematic approach,
exercise
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 can turn into a habit.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • digital entertainment
  • physical inactivity
  • recreational facilities
  • modern conveniences
  • remote work
  • high stress levels
  • streaming services
  • video games
  • social media
  • physical activity
  • accessibility
  • public awareness campaigns
  • health benefits
  • habit formation
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