It is sometimes thought that people who travel outside of their own country are more tolerant and understanding of others. To what extent do you agree?

Many hold the opinion that those who have visited multiple countries are more culturally enlightened and can adapt to others
alot
Suggestion
a lot
better,
in contrast
, to those who have not. I fully agree with
this
statement. For the remainder of
this
essay, I will discuss the reasons why travelling abroad allows different people to co-exist peacefully.
Firstly
, when someone goes abroad during the holidays, they have higher exposure to other people and traditions.
Therefore
, any stereotypes that they have encountered in the past can be set straight.
This
is because, people often tend to believe things once they live through them.
For example
, in 2014, my Swedish friend, Ellen, moved to the Middle East, at
first
she had a very negative misconception about the
muslim
of or relating to or supporting Islamism
Muslim
community.
However
, after one year of living there her views changed entirely, she even dated a
muslim
of or relating to or supporting Islamism
Muslim
man, due to the fact that, she understood the religion and its followers in much more detail. Undoubtedly,
globetrotting
Suggestion
globe-trotting
gives a person the upper hand in human interaction.
Secondly
,
although
never leaving your home town gives you an in depth understanding of your own society, travelling allows people to expand their minds to
acomodate
be agreeable or acceptable to
accommodate
different languages, cultures and music. In turn, learning things you would usually not know through the internet or through books.
For instance
, I was
completey
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
unaware of the cold personalities of
German people
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the German people
and thought that they were simply rude and unwelcoming. That was
untill
up to, before the time
until
I visited Germany in 2016.
Consequently
, my views changed 100% and I learnt to appreciate their professionalism and monotonous speaking. Overall, there are many misunderstandings when it comes to acknowledging other individuals' cultures, especially when there is no direct exposure to them. In conclusion, visiting other nations paves the way for easier global communication and social enlightenment.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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