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Films and games can be accessed at any time from mobile devices, like smartphones, tablets and laptop computers. Do the advantage of such developments outweigh the disadvantages?

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In our rapidly developing world, internet has been providing access to the entertainments,
such
 as virtual games or movies. In order to tackle
adverce
contrary to your interests or welfare
adverse
 effects and avoid
this
 condition to become heartbreaking advancement, appropriate usage of the internet
on
Suggestion
at
this
 end may merit plethora of pros that may outstrip the demerits.
This
 essay will discuss both sides and draw plausible conclusion. Perhaps it should be acknowledged that, addictive feature of the online games and films may draw
full attention
Suggestion
the full attention
 of
user
Suggestion
the user
users
, which baffles person to zero in on single affair.
For instance
, through the internet students can connect to the online games that appealed to them, regardless their location and even if they were sitting at the lesson or workers may squander their times with watching films online
instead
 of accomplishing on their given tasks.
As a result
, productivity of the workers and students will suffer. After all, because of the
such
 incidents,
this
 development may be contemplated as a negative one. On the other side, its impact will fluctuate according to
usage
Suggestion
the usage
 of
this
 opportunity, which means
this
 trend can be utilised on academic or salutary purposes, as well. To illustrate that, squandering time on the way be perfect example, with which hefty proportion of people confront on their everyday life.
Instead
 of flowing time during the reaching destination via only concentrating on the way, practicing new language through watching online films or socialising
thorugh
from beginning to end
through
thorough
 virtual games would be bright instance of availing
this
 convenience.
Consequently
, people can elevate their productivity with sparing time or multitasking. The conclusion to be drawn is that, with taking benefit of
this
situtaion
the general state of things; the combination of circumstances at a given time
situation
 cons that stem from that may be
overweighted
usually describes a large person who is fat but has a large frame to carry it
overweight
,
instead
 of taking that for granted.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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