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There is increase of noise in our daily lives nowadays. Why is this a problem? What can be done to reduce it?

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Today,
world
Suggestion
the world
 is impacted by different pollutions
such
 as air
pollution
, water
pollution
,
noise
pollution
 and so on. Most
concerning among
Accept comma addition
concerning, among
 these is
noise
pollution
. In
this
 essay, we will discuss, why
this
 kind of
pollution
 has been increasing and how it is impacting the world.
To begin
 with, increase in
noise
 these days is directly proportional to the increase in population. Numbers of people are increasing across the world and so are the numbers of vehicles. Due to
this
, traffic congestion is increasing which rises the
hilonking
 on the roads and
this
 makes the sense of hearing
vulblnerable
susceptible to attack
vulnerable
.
For instance
, you can find the quote as "Please don't honk" at the back of every
third
 vehicle on the road. Technology is another aspect that takes an important part in increasing the
noise
 levels. Various music systems like loudspeakers, stereo systems are
played
Suggestion
playing
 above the permissible levels. Not only humans, but
also animals are
Suggestion
animals are also
 facing these issues of
high level
Suggestion
the high level
high levels
 of
noise
. To say,
government
Suggestion
the government
 should lay down the rules and regulations for these levels and need to check on defaulters on
regular basis
Suggestion
a regular basis
. Awareness programs among the people is the need of
hour
Suggestion
the hour
. They need to be educated about the disadvantages of high levels of
noise
 and need to understand
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 impact on
up coming
of the relatively near future
upcoming
 generation.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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