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Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects, others think that they should focus on subjects which they do best or find interesting. Discuss both view and your opinion.

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In recent times, educational system demand student to learn on all the syllabus whereas others believe that it is essential to concentrate on the subject they usually excel than others.
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 with, the advantages of acquiring all the areas of studies clearly can be seen. They will gain vital knowledge and skills in every aspect of life which will be useful as they grew older. An artist not only requires drawing and show their
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 talent but
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, they need to know how finance themselves to support their living expenses.
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, students can be versatile and at the same time, becoming a better citizen
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 the society. Despite of that, studying a number of subjects at the same time, can be extremely stressful and burdening for the adolescents. Sadly,
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 cause them to drop out of school or unable to cope up with the studies.
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, learning only specific types of the subjects helps to
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 strengthen the potential in them.
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, it boosts their
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confidence
 level that they able to achieve something they desire and work even harder.
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, one may lack in other aspects which may be crucial for their future and desperately seeking for help to solve it. In conclusion, based on my perspective, it is for the best to concentrate all the topic they need in becoming an all-rounded person. In spite of that, teachers or lecturers need to give them space to nurture into the field of their preference.
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