You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level

Dear sir / madam, My name is Liya and writing
letter to express my interest and enquire about your one-week walking
package in the mountain. I received a brochure for a trip to the mountains. So, would like to collect some information regarding your trip. I am very excited about different types of risky or dangerous games that you will arrange for getting more enjoyment like mountain climbing, paragliding, skydiving etc.
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of games, so I need to enjoy these holidays very well . I would
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you could provide some details regarding the
arrangement like
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the price

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of the
, place , mode of travel , food and accommodation , and especially about the dates because I need to submit
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application in my office . I would
like to express my concerns about my health condition, because
month I faced a breathing problem
that is
because of dust allergy, so I need to know that place selected is suitable for me. I look forward
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and my decision will
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with your response. Yours faithfully Liya
Submitted by Liya on

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