Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Many organizations
finance sports
Accept comma addition
finance, sports
to promote their products. There is much debate whether or not
this
is a positive or negative development.
This
essay will, discuss both these views, followed by a reasoned conclusion. On the one hand, when a business
such
as, Nike, invests in the Olympics, they create a very beneficial effect on their audience.
This
is because, viewers may be inspired by their items of clothing, shoes or gadgets. In turn, they may be encouraged to participate in physical activity.
For example
, in the 2014 winter Olympics, Nike dressed the USA skiing participants in their brand new outfits.
Consequently
, 2000 athletes bought these clothing items. Resulting in a 12% increase in people participating in winter sports. Overall, the media can have a very good influence of people, globally.
On the other hand
, despite the many health conscious organizations sponsoring sports, there are
also
unhealthy organizations. It is
also
very common for Fast Food joints to use sporting events for advertising their new dishes. In
this
case,
this
trend is disadvantageous. The reason being, is that these foods are detrimental to one's health and
wellbeing
Suggestion
well being
.
Therefore
, using a healthy event,
for instance
, the FIFA World Cup, to draw attention to these foods, communicates mixed, conflicted messages about health.
Moreover
, through these advertisements people
graviate
move toward
gravitate
towards bad eating options. Undoubtedly, companies may have a negative effect on the mass'. In
concusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
,
although
there are many
benefirs
financial assistance in time of need
benefits
to the use of sporting events to advertise products, they are not without drawbacks.
However
, I firmly believe that the advantages of
this
outweigh the
disadvatanges
the quality of having an inferior or less favorable position
disadvantage
.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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