Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday matters (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

It is argued whether having a say in choosing what to eat, wear or how to play, will make
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so self-centered in the future.
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, some people believe that it is so crucial to involve
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in everyday
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. I firmly agree with the latter view. On
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hand, some individuals think that
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letting
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decide about every single matter
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their own will ultimately make them too egotistical and self-absorbed to care about
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others in society. They may believe that
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uncontrolled authority for young
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may lead to never apprehending the limitations and
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situations. Take a child who has always reached what they have wanted shortly after they made up their mind and required them,
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. They may never have been curbed for their
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by their parents which can lead them on a path of self-centered lives and they may never try to be considerate or tactful.
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, I believe
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can independently make their own
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and learn to feel sympathetic and considerate about
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others.
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, some parents believe that
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should have the chance to decide about everything
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their own for two main reasons. First and foremost, they will learn to accept all the responsibilities of their
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.
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,
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understand that they can never
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others for the
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circumstances
they have been through as they are the
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who has chosen
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.
Secondly
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, the more practical role
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have in their lives, the more confident and
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self-reliant
they will be in the future. I believe that parents can simultaneously give their
children
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the opportunity of independent
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and
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their needs without pampering them. In conclusion, some people claim that
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letting
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decide about all their daily matters will lead to
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a society full of selfish and non-collaborating people.
However
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, I believe that it not only teaches
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to stay on their own feet but
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them feel more assertive.

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task achievement
Clarify your main arguments and support them with clear examples. Avoid vague phrases.
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Use linking words to improve the flow between ideas, making it easier for readers to follow your argument.
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Check for minor spelling and grammatical errors, as they can distract from your message.
task achievement
You present a clear opinion that supports your argument well.
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Your structure is clear with an introduction and conclusion.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Autonomy
  • Consequence-awareness
  • Self-centered
  • Informal decision-making education
  • Child development
  • Age-appropriate choices
  • Cognitive growth
  • Fostering independence
  • Parental guidance
  • Societal norms
  • Interpersonal consideration
  • Balance of freedom
  • Individualism versus collectivism
  • Experience-based learning
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