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The range and quality of food that we can buy has changed because of technological and scientific advances. Some people regard this change as an improvement, while others believe that it is harmful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Improved
science
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 and
technology
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 brought people a variety of
food
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 in changing
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quality
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the quality
. It is argued by some that
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 change is a positive development.
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, it is redeemed as harmful for others. In my opinion, changes
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in
food
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as a
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result
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 of
science
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 and
technology
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 is an improvement. On one hand, cutting edge
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 and scientific improvements
enhance
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to enhance
food
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 industry.
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, new research and
developments
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development
 results in increase in efficiency
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in
of
 agriculture.
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, fertilizers gathered from worms brought a huge increase
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in
 the harvest,
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 many farmers started to use
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 type of fertilizer
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 of traditional ones.
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,
food
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quality
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 has risen due to recent technological advances. Systems like drop-watering keeps crops hydrated even in very difficult circumstances like shortage of water.
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result
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,
food
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 will be in a better
quality
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.
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, some
people
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peoples'
 worries about the developments in
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 and
science
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 will be harmful. People claim some
technology
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 like genetic changes will
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 in diseases
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 as cancer,
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, researches show no evidence for
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hypotheses
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hypothesis
.
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, it is believed that latest scientific developments
for
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in
 production pollutes the environment in a high rate.
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, people believe that agricultural chemicals
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 in soil and water pollution,
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however developed
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however, developed
 methods brings more clean solutions due to the previous knowledge. In conclusion, it is true that
science
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 and
technology
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 improvements changed the variety and
quality
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 of
food
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 that people can buy. Some people believe that it is an improvement, but others believe it is dangerous. In my opinion,
science
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 and
technology
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 affected
food
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 in a positive way due to developments in
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food industry
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the food industry
 and
food
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quality
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.
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