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Many things used to be done in the home by hands are now being done by machines. Does this development bring more advantages or disadvantages?

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It is often argued that
machines
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the machines
 have taken the place human beings, which is
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 true to some extent.
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, I strongly believe that there are more disadvantages in comparison to the number of advantages. My inclination is justified in following paragraphs. Some of the advantages of replacing machines with humans, it makes the
work
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 easier and less time consuming. Which helps in increasing the efficiency of the
work
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.
There
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Their
 reason behind
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 is machines are programmed in
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 a manner that they have a tendency to
work
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 faster than most humans. They are more accurate and more reliable in comparison.
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, machines do the
work
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 quicker than labourers in any industry, even they have surpassed humans in calculating as most of us use calculators to ease the load.
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, machines are made to lower the burden on our shoulders. There are several disadvantages as well, which in my opinion over shadow the advantages. Machines make people lazy, which leads to several health problems as we lose our desire to
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. It creates unemployment in several sectors and many poor starve because of it, which is definitely a more important concern.
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, Tesla launching driver less cars in India will affect the
lifes
a characteristic state or mode of living
lives
life
 of many lower class people living in India as the sector contributes a high rate of
employbility
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 in the country.
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, the using
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 machineries may lead to hazardous issues and affect the economic development of a nation. To recapitulate, I reckon these issues have more significance in comparison to the merits of developing
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 machines and the government needs to take initiates to limit the usage machines and encourage hand
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.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Automation
  • Efficiency
  • Manual labor
  • Displacement
  • Homemaking skills
  • Technological advancements
  • Self-sufficiency
  • Resource depletion
  • Energy efficiency
  • Social dynamics
  • Operational understanding
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