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The problem of global warming is becoming a matter of great concern for nations because of the increased Human intervention in nature, overtime .There are various reasons behind rise of global temperature ,some of them are discussed in ensuring paragraphs with their remedial actions.

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The main reason behind elevation of
earth
temperature
 is deforestation. To accommodate large population trees are to be cut down.
As a result
, the level of natural gases
such
 as Oxygen and Carbon dioxide in
environment
Suggestion
the environment
 is imbalanced
.
Accept space
.
 With increased carbon dioxide, which is period has been gas responsible for global warming the
earth
 is getting hotter
gradually
Suggestion
graded
.
Further
, industrialisation is another factor leading to global warming. Enhanced economic activities over time result in
construction
Suggestion
the construction
 of many manufacturing industries. Various processes involved in manufacturing results in generation of harmful gases.
For instance
,
Accept space
,
 use of chlorofluorocarbons in refrigerator production releases harmful carbon contents in environment depleting protective Ozone Layer around
Earth
Suggestion
the Earth
 causing harmful sun rays entering
Earth
's atmosphere.
Thus
, leading to rise in words
temperature
 scale. To eliminate Global Warming afforestation is
most convenient method
Suggestion
the most convenient method
. Planting trees is what should be done to neutralize the dire effect of carbon dioxide emissions.
Hence
,
Accept space
,
preventing
earth
's
temperature
 from Rising.
In addition
 to
this
, government should regularise industrial processes and promote
use
Suggestion
the use
 of conventional sources of
energy
such
 as wind and water
energy
instand
in place of, or as an alternative to
instead
 of thermal
energy
. Pollutants generated from incomplete combustion of coal in
manufacturing sector
Suggestion
the manufacturing sector
 will be suppressed by using clean sources
instead
. To Summarise,
problem
Suggestion
the problem
 of increased
temperature
 of planet
earth
 can be controlled by encouraging people to grow more trees, with great restrictions put by government on industrial air pollution and promoting cleaner source of
energy
 rather than traditional global warming can be regulated easily.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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