Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.

Advertising has advanced to a great extent in the past decade due to cut throat competition in the market. Every company wants to promote their products and increase the brand value and earn more and more money. And advertising helps to a great extent. In today’s world, we can see a huge of products
the same category and
, to stand out in the market, the companies prefer better advertisements or banner or even better packaging. So, when the target customer watches the advertisements on the TV or in newspapers, what they is the magnified good qualities or features of the products. Because people in today’s world care about saving money wherever possible, the companies use the words like “SALE” or “Discounts” to attract people. We, as a customer, see an opportunity to save money and think of buying the
without even looking into the details of the
or whether we need it or not. I will take the example of Amazon Echo. In the advertisements, what we see is that the owner asks to play a song or asks for an information and echo plays that song or replies with the answer. We start to think about “It is so small”, “How can it do it?”, “What if I have it and use it for so many things?”. But what the
is really doing is making the people lazy and lethargic. It is taking you away from learning it by yourself by looking into books or
the web
. So, in
conclusion I
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conclusion, I
would like to say that people should be thinking about the positives of the
and its usefulness in their life, rather than getting mesmerized by the looks and the way it has been presented in the advertisements.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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