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Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives.

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Advertisement is a tool that helps
consumer
Suggestion
consumers
the consumer
 to identify a
product
 or service. It is a way of sharing a story about a
product
 or service. History shows that
story telling
The act or practice of telling stories
storytelling
 had been a part human evolution. The method which has changed since the days of cave paintings to today’s graphic designing. Companies, brands have been using
this
 concept since the idea of consumerism have been established, probably even before the paper was manufactured. In my opinion advertisements helps us to know about new products. Today we see advertisements on various platforms like print media, radio, television, internet and social media. There are myriad formats of advertisements too; like commercials, posters, banners, hoarding, radio jingles, online ads,
influencer
 marketing etc. I personally love short commercials which
tells
Suggestion
tell
 us a story. The recent Dove commercial which reflects women empowerment is a brilliant ad campaign. They shared stories of different women from different walks of life across the globe and never did they mention their
product
 except at the end. The ad was a success as it was an awareness project which ditched the old idea of beauty and that women in today’s world is capable of doing any work.
Similarly
, another ad which caught my attention was Coca-Cola promoting its “Avengers” can
launched
Suggestion
launch
 during the release of the new “Avengers” movie.
It
Suggestion
It's
 simple talked about its new
product
 using the recent trend. Another great Indian campaign was “A drop of life” on polio drops was the pivotal success in putting India on the map of
polio free nation
Suggestion
the polio free nation
polio free nations
. In conclusion, I would like to say advertisement is a beautiful art that helps us to know
of
Suggestion
about
 different things around us and we always have a choice to make the right decision for ourselves regarding a purchase. We really cannot blame
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 advertisements.
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  • encourage
  • persuade
  • manipulative
  • unnecessary
  • excessive
  • artificial needs
  • desires
  • consumers
  • oversaturation
  • impulse buying
  • financial problems
  • inform
  • educate
  • features
  • benefits
  • innovations
  • raise awareness
  • social issues
  • positive behavior
  • enrich
  • well-being
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